攻克雅思超级外教课 第102期:雅思托福写作5大常见错误(7)
日期:2016-11-23 17:06

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But then you don't give me any examples. Okay?
但是接着你们没有给我任何例子。
For example, if you're talking about books, this is like already the second sentence, you're talking about what books he likes, what science he likes...
比如说,如果你们在谈论书,这就像已经在第二段了,你们在谈论他喜欢什么书,他喜欢什么科学......
For example, if a child likes dinosaurs, the parents can then go buy him a dinosaur set, a model set, or books about dinosaurs,
举个例子来说,如果一个孩子喜欢恐龙,那家长可以给他买一套恐龙,一个模型套装,或者一本关于恐龙的书,
or they can take him to the museum to see... the Natural History Museum to see how dinosaurs evolved, and died, and etc.
或者他们可以带他去博物馆看......去自然历史博物馆看恐龙是如何进化的,如何死亡的等等。
Or if you're talking about TV, well, what's wrong with TV? TV can be very educational, but for your purpose, you want to give the example.
或者如果你们在谈论电视,那么,电视有什么问题呢?电视可以很有教育性啊,但是为了你们的目的,你们要给出例子。
If the child is watching too many cartoons or is watching violent movies, he's not going to be able to concentrate on his math homework.
如果孩子看太多动画片或者看暴力电影,他就不能集中注意力完成他的数学家庭作业了。
Right? Or if his imagination is getting carried away, how's he going to concentrate on his science lessons?
对吧? 或者如果他的脑洞开太大,他要怎么集中于他的科学课呢?
So, give me the points, yes, make sure that you give me concrete examples.
所以,给我观点,没错,但也要确保你们给出了具体的例子。
"Concrete" meaning give me a real thing, something I can actually hold onto.
“具体”是指给我真正的事情,我能真正支持的事情。
The dinosaur set, concrete example, cartoons on TV, concrete examples. Okay?
恐龙套装是具体的例子,电视上的动画片是具体的例子,懂了吗?
Make sure you support your reasons with examples.
确保你们用例子佐证了你们的理由。
Make sure you support your argument with reasons.
确保你们用理由支持了你们的论点。
Everything has to be connected, better to take only one or two of these ideas, expand on them, and give me examples to support them to make them stronger. Okay?
每件事都必须被连结起来,最好只用这些想法中的一两个,然后对它们进行扩展,给我例子来支持它们,使它们更有力。
So, this is the general idea about the paragraphs in body one, body two.
那么,这是正文一、正文二的段落的总体思路。
Same thing for body two, you're going to a new topic, introduce it with a topic, make sure you have the transition between paragraph,
正文二也是一样,你们要转向一个新话题,用一个话题来介绍它,确保你们在段落之间有过渡,
body paragraph one and two, topic sentence, reason you think so, example, maybe another point, go on to your conclusion.
有正文段落一和二、主题句、你们认为的理由、例子、也许另一个观点,然后转入结尾。
Now, this one, the last one, this is actually a bit of a "pet peeve", I'll explain this expression.
这一个,最后这一点实际上有点"pet peeve",我会解释这个表达是什么意思的。
A "pet peeve" is something that you find really annoying. Right?
"pet peeve"就是你觉得非常烦人的事情。
Something that happens all the time, and it really bothers you.
这件事一直发生,而且让你深感烦扰。
So I've had many students, and I've explained to them this point, I'm going to explain to you in a second, and I say: "Don't do this."
我有很多学生,我已经跟他们解释过这一点了,我很快就给你们解释,我说:“不要这么做。”
And then their next essay, they do it again; and then their next essay, they do it again, like, you say: "Don't do it, don't do it", and they do it, and they do it.
然后在他们下一篇作文里,他们会再犯,然后下一篇作文里,又会犯,就像你说“不要这么做,不要这么做”,然后他们就这么做,就这么做。

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